(Had to round up only because... well... ugh... Story wasn't utterly horrible, but everything else was.)
This was really bad. I mean, I understand it was a short story, but... this is ridiculous. So much went wrong, it isn't even funny. And not to mention the writing. It was... *rubs at eyeballs and tries to erase image of horrible writing from my mind* I just want to forget the last half hour of my life ever happened.